The Revenant's abilities

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Name:Ghostly flight
Rank:C - S (Currently c)
Power:Wraith physiology
Description:An invisible psychic energy surrounds the Revenant allowing her to fly. This mid-air maneuvering allows her to avoid targeting from ground level assaults and to stalk her prey from a higher vantage point. Her flight speed is 150 MPH and will often leave a trail of her signature rosy scented mist.

This says C-S but it doesn't say what it does at higher ranks? Explain that please.

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Name:No blindspots
Rank:D
Power:Wraith physiology
Description:One of the many abilities the supernatural entity granted the revenant was having 360 vision, an ability which quite literally allows her to see in all directions at once. This is not done through the use of her eyes which are primarily used for incapacitating her prey but is achieved through her ghostly aura which is constantly using a highly advanced form of echolocation. Due to this supernatural gift sneaking up on the Revenant is exceedingly difficult.

360 degree vision?.. at D rank? lol forgive my bluntness but uh.. No. Maybe work your way up from C rank to S rank and eventually gaining the 360 vision.

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Name:Selective imperceptibility
Rank: D
Power:Wraith physiology
Description: The Revenant is totally imperceptible when passive, and as such can in no way be detected or noticed with by external forces without her allowing them to. She cannot be smelt and gives off no heat, yet the space she occupies has no lack of it. She is completely inaudible and makes no sound, other than when she is mourning and using said noise to attract her prey, and cannot be properly touched or seen without revealing herself. To all intents and purposes, she does not exist. However, she may still be able to interact with others through use of the other abilities she possesses, and so may also still be able to attack a target.

Again.. No.. that's an ability thats so beyond D rank that its not even funny ._. that's easily an S ranked thing, plus it makes you almost completely undetectable,m change that. to a form of way to detecting you besides pure eyesight.

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Name:Revenant's regeneration
Rank:C - S (Currently C)
Power:Wraith physiology/fog generation
Description:The Revenant enters a healing trance allowing the her to heal without danger. This ability generates a ghostly aura of healing energy which accelerates the regeneration process and provides her with an extremely dense fog. The life energy required for said regeneration is absorbed from outside areas.
C - Light Wounds
B - Bruises and Internal Injury
A - Large gashes
S - Anything but lethal wounds

How long does it take the wounds? Specifics my friend, we must haz specifics!

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Name:Overwhelming grief
Rank:C - S (Currently c)
Power: Wraith physiology
Description:Since the revenant is so consumed by her never-ending grief and sadness she has become highly unpredictable in her thoughts and actions. Coupled with the otherworldly entity that has latched itself to her spirit the Revenant's mind is practically incapable of being read, not only will the telepathic intrusion get overwhelmed with her sadness but may possibly get attacked by the supernatural being.

Not only does this make no sense besides being unreadable, you, again, have C-S yet no where is stated what happens at higher ranks.. So please edit those in.

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Name:Love me or Fear me
Rank:C -S (Currently C)
Power:Wraith physiology
Description:The Revenant is able to make people feel extreme pleasure or discomfort from the mere sight of her. Used as a weapon, this power can effectively incapacitate victims with weakness and nausea. Said victims will either be frozen with absolute horror or an inescapable infatuation with the beautiful spirit. People(NPCs) two ranks below her would most definitely fall victim to this ability. People a rank below her are 20% less effective in combat, distracted by the otherworldly beauty and nightmarish aura.

20% doesn't give me much info turn .-. , also change it to either love or fear, not both, also make it so its one rank below you and not NPCs, make it PCs (Player Controllers)

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Name:Spirit flicker
Rank: C - S (Currently C)
Power: Wraith physiology
Description:The Revenant can perform a burst of speed that allows her to move so fast it appears as if she has teleported, she can sustain only short dashes however. In most cases she is able to maneuver at the high speeds accurately and does not cause any shock or disturbance to the surface she stops on, this is partly due to her intangible nature as well. This technique is commonly used to dodge projectiles, move behind enemies, and generally confuse her prey. It can also be used to get away from a fight. In this case it may cause her to appear as if she was teleporting short distances away every second or so rather than moving at a constant high speed away from a fight. Other applications include using the technique to move back and forth between different areas to cause an after image of herself making it appear as if there are multiple copies of the ghostly figure. The Revenant moves fast enough to leave an after image of herself making it appear as if there are multiples of herself. The copies may appear still or appear to take action although they will eventually melt into her fog. (C = 5 metres, B = 10 metres, A = 20 metres, S = 30 metres)

give some form of weakness to this. a way to counter it.

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Name:Neverending hunger
Rank:C-S (currently C)
Power: Wraith Physiology
Description:The Revenant regains health and vitality as she absorbs souls and youthfulness while the victim declines in their vigor. Constant exposure to this ability may result in death. Depending on close the victim is relation to the Revenant will ultimately determine how quickly their soul is absorbed. This ability feeds of the very spiritual essence of her prey, thus eradicating all forms of emotions and life within her victims. Depending on how close the victim is and what the level the Revenant is ultimately depends on how quickly she absorbs their soul and how close she needs to be to succeed in doing so. (C = 5 feet + 3 posts for complete soul absorption, B = 10 feet + 3 posts for complete soul absorption, A = 25 feet + 2 posts for complete soul absorption, S = 50 feet + 2 posts for complete soul absorption)

Just.. get rid of this.. please..

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Name:Haunted Mist
Rank:C -S (Currently C)
Power:/Wraith Physiology/Fog generation
Description: a faculty of supernatural illusions in which the Revenant induces psychedelic hallucinations in subjects at will primarily through the use of her constantly shifting ectoplasmic fog. This ability psychically causes the subject's imagination to overact, resulting in paranoia and delirium. This ability may even cause the foe to feel as though only experiencing that which is pleasurable to him, in most cases them marvelling at the delicate beauty of the revenant herself instead of what’s actually happening...having their very soul sucked out of them. This ability lasts as long as the target stays within her fog and the psychedelic effects last one post after they manage to escape the haunted mist.

again.. the C-S thing.. also.. make it so at first its just a simple illusion.. and later on it effects all that.. weird.. mental shit..

Edits made (:

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Name:Selective imperceptibility
Rank: C - S (currently C)
Power:Wraith physiology
Description: The Revenant is totally imperceptible when passive, and as such can in no way be detected or noticed with by external forces without her allowing them to. She gives off no heat, yet the space she occupies has no lack of it. She is completely inaudible and makes no sound, other than when she is mourning and using said noise to attract her prey, and cannot be properly touched or seen without revealing herself. To all intents and purposes, she does not exist. However, she may still be able to interact with others through use of the other abilities she possesses, and so may also still be able to attack a target. There is however the constant lingering scent of roses and the cold chill that is contantly shifting in the nearby vicinity of her, so anyone with keen enough senses will immediately recognize her presence.
C = detectable through rosy scent, cold chill and occasional mourning
B = detectable through rosy scent and cold chill
A = detectable through her rosy scent
S = completely imperceptible

for S rank put, "completely imperceptible, except by seeing the Revenant"

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Name:Revenant's regeneration
Rank:C - S (Currently C)
Power:Wraith physiology/fog generation
Description:The Revenant enters a healing trance allowing the her to heal without danger. This ability generates a ghostly aura of healing energy which accelerates the regeneration process and provides her with an extremely dense fog. The life energy required for said regeneration is absorbed from outside areas.
C - Light Wounds (3 posts)
B - Bruises and Internal Injury (2 posts)
A - Large gashes (1 post)
S - Anything but lethal wounds (almost immediately after getting injured)

Flip those posts times around, C rank is immediately, B rank is 1 post, A is two, and S is 3

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Name:Overwhelming grief
Rank:C - S (Currently c)
Power: Wraith physiology
Description:Since the revenant is so consumed by her never-ending grief and sadness she has become highly unpredictable in her thoughts and actions, mind readers would have a particularly hard time working out her thought process. Not only will the telepathic intrusion get overwhelmed with her sadness but may possibly get attacked by the supernatural being that resides within her.
C = mind readers will experience low level headaches
B = mind readers will experience a migraine with some emotional discomfort
A = mind readers will experience a heavy migraine with an increased level of depression
S = mind readers will experience a heavy migraine and will be incapacited with overwhelming grief.

put up a way to counter this.

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Name:The bride and her beauty
Rank:C -S (Currently C)
Power:Wraith physiology
Description:The Revenant is able to make people feel extreme pleasure from the mere sight of her. Used as a weapon, this power can effectively incapacitate victims with weakness and nausea. Said victims will either be frozen with an inescapable infatuation with the beautiful spirit. People(PCs) one ranks below her would most definitely fall victim to this ability.
C = works on 1 PC who becomes 20% less effective one post after gazing at her
B = works on 2-3 PCs who become 20% less effective one post after gazing at her
A = works on 4-5 PCs who become 25% less effective one post after gazing at her
S = works on all PCs who become 30% less effective immediately after gazing at her

Again, 20% isn't telling me much, put it in words like "After this the person experiences a blurry vision!" but in ranks mmk?

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Name:Haunted Mist
Rank:C -S (Currently C)
Power:/Wraith Physiology/Fog generation
Description: a faculty of supernatural illusions in which the Revenant induces psychedelic hallucinations in subjects at will primarily through the use of her constantly shifting ectoplasmic fog. This ability psychically causes the subject's imagination to overact, resulting in paranoia and delirium. This ability may even cause the foe to feel as though only experiencing that which is pleasurable to him, in most cases them marvelling at the delicate beauty of the revenant herself instead of what’s actually happening...having their very soul sucked out of them. This ability lasts as long as the target stays within her fog and the psychedelic effects last one post after they manage to escape the haunted mist.
C = mild illusions (i.e noises, flickers of light and nightmarish limbs)
B = illusions (i.e faces in the mist, monstrous creatures) which provoke increasing paranoia
A = illusions (I.e dead relatives, worst fears, copies of the revenant) which cause increasing delirium and paranoia. Victims caught in the mist become 25% less effective in battle
S = powerful illusions (I.e tangible creatures, worst fears, shifting environment) which cause victim to become completely paranoid and delirious. Victims caught in the mist become 50% less effective in battle.

Same as before, change the percents into sentences.

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Name:Selective imperceptibility
Rank: C - S (currently C)
Power:Wraith physiology
Description: The Revenant is totally imperceptible when passive, and as such can in no way be detected or noticed with by external forces without her allowing them to. She gives off no heat, yet the space she occupies has no lack of it. She is completely inaudible and makes no sound, other than when she is mourning and using said noise to attract her prey, and cannot be properly touched or seen without revealing herself. To all intents and purposes, she does not exist. However, she may still be able to interact with others through use of the other abilities she possesses, and so may also still be able to attack a target. There is however the constant lingering scent of roses and the cold chill that is contantly shifting in the nearby vicinity of her, so anyone with keen enough senses will immediately recognize her presence.
C = detectable through rosy scent, cold chill and occasional mourning
B = detectable through rosy scent and cold chill
A = detectable through her rosy scent
S = completely imperceptible except by seeing the Revenant

Due to the nature of this you will need to set it up where she can only hold it for so long or she cannot attack in this state.

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Name:Spirit flicker
Rank: C - S (Currently C)
Power: Wraith physiology
Description:The Revenant can perform a burst of speed that allows her to move so fast it appears as if she has teleported, she can sustain only short dashes however. In most cases she is able to maneuver at the high speeds accurately and does not cause any shock or disturbance to the surface she stops on, this is partly due to her intangible nature as well. This technique is commonly used to dodge projectiles, move behind enemies, and generally confuse her prey. It can also be used to get away from a fight. In this case it may cause her to appear as if she was teleporting short distances away every second or so rather than moving at a constant high speed away from a fight. Other applications include using the technique to move back and forth between different areas to cause an after image of herself making it appear as if there are multiple copies of the ghostly figure. The Revenant moves fast enough to leave an after image of herself making it appear as if there are multiples of herself. The copies may appear still or appear to take action although they will eventually melt into her fog. This ability can be easily countered by those who possess particularly sharp reflexes and those with keen eyesight who would find no problem in tracking her movements.(C = 5 metres, B = 10 metres, A = 20 metres, S = 30 metres)

State how fast she actually moves. Or you could make it where the eyes percieve her to move faster than what she really is.


Everything else is fine.

Approved for training/Purchase

https://marvelunlimited.forumotion.com/t1125-two-lovers-and-a-loner-training-part-1-bride-and-her-beauty-soul-stealing-selective-imperceptibility

Trained abilities - bride and her Beauty, Soul stealing and selective imperceptibility.

Approved.