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Zapper
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Join date : 2012-12-24
| | Subject: Marcos' New Light Thu Dec 27, 2012 11:11 pm | |
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Name: Photokinetic Wing Manifestation
Rank: C-S(C)
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
Marcos has the ability to form wings out of light and use them from transportation and defensive purposes such as using them as a shield to block oncoming attacks, or blinding them by making the light from the wings even brighter. Using these wings, the user can fly for up to 150 mph. The wings can only take damage from weapons equal or below its rank, and physical/psionic/elemental damage below its rank. Physical - 1000 lbs, Psionic and elemental - below its rank.
Name: Photokinetic Constructs
Rank: C-S(C)
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
Marcos can handle light like it was a tangible object, turning it into tools, objects, weapons and other items. The user can only create simple constructs such as weapons, platforms, and other item. These constructs has no special or complicated abilities other than how they are made and that they are made out of light. He can control these constructs, even from far away.
C Rank - their function/effectiveness has a limit of being comparable to C-level items and weapons. Weapons/items/objects has a maximum size of a small car, and a minimum of a pebble. Platforms has a limit of 8 meters in terms of length and width, and can only be up to 4 inches thick. Constructs will dissipate if more than 15 meters away from user. Can only take damage equal or lower than its rank. Cooldown is equal to the amount of posts the construct/s lasted and to a maximum of 3 posts. Can only create one construct of the maximum size, or two constructs less than that.
Constructs can only be broken with a force of more than 1000 lbs(no matter their size), while platforms with more than 800. Can take physical, elemental, and psionic damage. Psionic and elemental - below the construct's rank.
Name: Invisibility via light
Rank: C
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
By bending,shifting, and reflecting the light particles around him, Marcos can make himself invisible. However, he can still be detected through methods other than sight.
Name: Light Energy Projection
Rank: C-S(C)
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
Marcos can release light energy as various kinds of attacks, from his body to do explosive and/or piercing damage.
C Rank:
Beams - A beam of concentrated light and photons that Marcos can fire in a straight line. It can go as fast as 40 mph, is 2 feet in diameter and with piercing and explosive capabilities(if it can't pierce through it, it then explodes). Blast range - 5 feet. Dissipates once it goes as far as 20 meters. Can only pierce through defenses lower than its rank.
Ball - A ball of explosive light energy, that the user can throw, formed by concentrating photons in a spherical shape. Can be as big as a volleyball. Blast range - 8 feet. If needed be, the ball can be used like a flash bang, releasing a large amount of bright light, capable of blinding all within 5 meters of him once Marcos wills it. Dissipates if it goes as far as 20 meters away from Marcos.
Name: Light-infused Strength
Rank: C-S(C)
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
Marcos enhances his strength using the power of light, increasing the damage he could cause using physical attacks and allowing him to lift or punch with the force of 1000 lbs. In the process, he pumps his very being(or just a limb/s) with the light and absorbs it, turning it into his inner energy rather than just releasing it. While doing so, the part(or his body) infused with the light glows, the greater the amount he infuses, the brighter the glow.
Name: Light Speed
Rank: C-S(C)
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
A sub-power of Light Form, Marcos can run and move faster by turning partially or completely into light itself to enhance his speed.
C - 50mph
B - 180mph
A - 380mph
S - 480mph
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| | | | The Superior Spider
Posts : 1147
Join date : 2012-05-23
| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Fri Dec 28, 2012 11:04 pm | |
| For flight you can fly at 150mph at C rank. Feel free to boost it up from 140. Also, make sure you note the wings can only take damage from something below their rank. (though I usually like to see a time limit on constructs that can take damage like a shield so it's not an indefinite impenetrable shield.)
Your constructs needs to be cut down alot. 100 meters is way too far away and should be around 15m before they disperse from distance. Also the size being as big as a battleship is WAY too big for C rank. Cut it down to something much smaller. Like a small car like a beetle. Also add you can only make 2 constructs at a time and give a post count cool down count. Also what kind of damage can these constructs take?
Same with your projection move. It's C rank, that is way too powerful. Tone it down. C rank means you're just now learning of your powers so they shouldn't be that strong yet.
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| | | | Zapper
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Join date : 2012-12-24
| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Fri Dec 28, 2012 11:44 pm | |
| Alright then. Done, see if these could work. | |
| | | | Zapper
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Tue Jan 01, 2013 5:21 am | |
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| | | | The Superior Spider
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Join date : 2012-05-23
| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Tue Jan 01, 2013 1:07 pm | |
| Everything is good except that enhanced strength move. Don't get how light is boosting your strength pass its capabilities. Can you explain? | |
| | | | Zapper
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Tue Jan 01, 2013 9:38 pm | |
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| | | | The Superior Spider
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Tue Jan 01, 2013 10:10 pm | |
| Alright after talking to some staff they believe converting light into super strength wouldn't be applicable at C rank. Maybe once you rank up you can get it, however. Everything else is approved anyway, regardless. | |
| | | | Zapper
Posts : 20
Join date : 2012-12-24
| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Fri Jan 04, 2013 12:23 pm | |
| SessionsTrained the following: Photokinetic Wing Manifestation Photokinetic Constructs Light Speed Light Energy Projection | |
| | | | Zapper
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Tue Jan 08, 2013 5:45 am | |
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| | | | Zapper
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Sat Jan 12, 2013 1:21 am | |
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| | | | TheTempest
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Tue Jan 15, 2013 12:05 am | |
| Great read, thanks! I like your "secret group beneath the SoL" idea.
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| | | | TheTempest
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Tue Jan 15, 2013 12:08 am | |
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| | | | Zapper
Posts : 20
Join date : 2012-12-24
| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Sat Jan 19, 2013 2:25 am | |
| Gonna stack a few.
Name: Photokinetic Constructs
Rank: C-S(C)
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
Marcos can handle light like it was a tangible object, turning it into tools, objects, weapons and other items. The user can only create simple constructs such as weapons, platforms, and other item. These constructs has no special or complicated abilities other than how they are made and that they are made out of light. He can control these constructs, even from far away.
C Rank - their function/effectiveness has a limit of being comparable to C-level items and weapons. Weapons/items/objects has a maximum size of a small car, and a minimum of a pebble. Platforms has a limit of 8 meters in terms of length and width, and can only be up to 4 inches thick. Constructs will dissipate if more than 15 meters away from user. Can only take damage equal or lower than its rank. Cooldown is equal to the amount of posts the construct/s lasted and to a maximum of 3 posts. Can only create one construct of the maximum size, or two constructs less than that.
Constructs can only be broken with a force of more than 1000 lbs(no matter their size), while platforms with more than 800. Can take physical, elemental, and psionic damage. Psionic and elemental - below the construct's rank.
Name: Light Speed
Rank: C-S(C)
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
A sub-power of Light Form, Marcos can run and move faster by turning partially or completely into light itself to enhance his speed.
C - 50mph
B - 180mph
A - 380mph
S - 480mph
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| | | | TheTempest
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Sun Jan 20, 2013 12:01 am | |
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| | | | TheTempest
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Sun Jan 20, 2013 12:02 am | |
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| | | | Zapper
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Wed Jan 23, 2013 7:17 am | |
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Name: Light Control
Rank: C
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
Marcos can control light and light particles, thus allowing him to manipulate the amount, kind, or intensity/brightness of the light around him or the ones he create. There are also levels of brightness to consider: darkness, shadowy, dim light, light, bright light, blinding light. The user can only change the brightness in area to two levels lower/higher than the original. However, he won't be able to use this in an area of complete darkness, since it lacks of light particles to control.
Name: Light Generation
Rank: C
Power: Light Manipulation
Description:
User can generate photons of light from one’s body, on various intensities and durations. He can also specify the kind of light he generates, sunlight, UV light, etc. Although this power is usually activated once in Light Form(but only the simple kind of bright light), the user can also generate different kinds of light when not using the aforementioned ability, but at a lower level than when in Light Form. As of now, Marcos can only generate UV light to a mildly low to moderate level in intensity.
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| | | | TheTempest
Posts : 189
Join date : 2012-12-24
| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Sun Jan 27, 2013 7:08 pm | |
| Sorry for the delay. I missed this post somehow.
Light Control
You need to specify intensity of light. For example, could he produce blinding light in a completely dark space? Or can he only adjust to certain levels? To bring this to defined game terms, I am accustomed to D&D levels of brightness: darkness, shadowy, dim light, light, bright light, blinding light. I'd suggest limiting the number of levels, especially at C rank.
Light Generation
You should specify the intensity of light your body can generate. Do you have to be in light body form? If not, maybe a dimmer or more focused light is better when not in light body form. That can change as the rank increases. Also the forms of light you can generate need to specifically spelled out by rank.
UV light can be a considerable weapon, especially depending upon the intensity. Considering the other aspects of this power and the intended uses, I think the UV light generated should be light to moderate in intensity.
Additionally
I'd further note that these two abilities can clearly be used in tandum. You could generate light of maybe normal level and then using Control increase it to bright light, but I would expect your body to be in light form, especially at C rank.
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| | | | Zapper
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Mon Jan 28, 2013 6:37 am | |
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| | | | TheTempest
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Tue Jan 29, 2013 11:28 pm | |
| Awesome. Great clear edits. Approved. | |
| | | | TheTempest
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| | Subject: Re: Marcos' New Light Tue Jan 29, 2013 11:29 pm | |
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