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PostSubject: Bets [Prestige]   Sun Jan 06, 2013 5:28 pm

Topic Name: Bets
Topic Link: Bets
Topic Participants:

Drake Archer [Drake]
Emelie Romskaug [Confused]

Topic Description: When thugs confront Drake about owing some money, a super-powered woman drops in to save him.
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PostSubject: Re: Bets [Prestige]   Mon Jan 07, 2013 11:43 pm

Prestige review with constructive comments. Feel free to PM with any comments, questions or concerns.

Length: 2
Relatively short.

English:
Drake Archer [Drake] - 5
Emelie Romskaug [Confused] - 4
Watch out for homophones and repeated words and you'll be golden.

Quality of Story: 2
If you'd expanded on the exchange more - a woman coming down out of nowhere to help - I would have definitely given more. It was a bit too abrupt but entertaining.

Quality of Writing:
Drake Archer [Drake] - 9
Very nice writing style but posts were on the shorter side.

Emelie Romskaug [Confused] - 7
Great that you want to describe actions but feels rushed in shorter posts.

Total:
Drake Archer [Drake] - 2+5+2+9 = 18
Emelie Romskaug [Confused] - 2+4+2+7 = 15


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PostSubject: Re: Bets [Prestige]   Mon Jan 07, 2013 11:45 pm

Added to the books.
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